My Dream Garden
As I wake up full of pride and joy
I look outside to my garden full of flowers
Bees and bugs flying all around
me buzzing and all types of nose
Walking around the garden I see a wall
With dark lights hiding all in its way
Beyond the walls so dark and tall
Is a bid fish pond with bright little fishes swimming away
As i walk towards the pond i see
stones on the bottom of the pond as i look
I see my reflection in the water i put my hand in the pond
The water is cold
By Rose
Hi Rose, I´m Tabby from Ahipara school great job on this blog post! I really enjoyed reading this and I like the fact that the writing was blue. I think that the poem was really good and it sounded like a nice happy environment. Maybe next time you could put capital letters on the letter I in the last paragraph? Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteKia ora Rose,I am a year six from Ahipara school. I really enjoyed reading your blog post about your dream garden. Maybe next time you could explain what you were doing. Keep up the great work! Blog ya later
ReplyDeleteHi Rose
ReplyDeleteI like your vision about your dream garden. It sounds like a place that I would enjoy relaxing in.
Maybe you can use some of your ideas for your school garden.
Keep up the good work.
Miss Atuahiva
Hi Rose its Gideon and I just want to say that you have presented an amazing and also outstanding google draw about your dream garden and I like how you talk about it. But anyways keep up the great work and also the great blogging and stay safe.:)
ReplyDeleteHey Rose, Ali-Jon here.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed about how you talked about you dream garden, keep up the great job and stay safe.
Ali-Jon
Kio Ora Rose, I liked your story about my dream garden.
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time use capitals for your I,s but keep up the good work
By Hayden
Kia ora Rose, I liked your story called My dream garden.
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time use capitals for your I,s. Keep up the good work. By Hayden from Ahipara School.
Hi Rose I like your story about your dream garden. I remember having to make a dream house with one of my favourite teachers. Maybe you could have checked your story for spelling. Keep up the work. Blog ya later, Tyrell from Ahipara School.
ReplyDeleteKia Orana Rose,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you describe your dream garden - it's very descriptive and fun. Next time double check your spelling- other than that, amazing work Rose. Keep it up!
-Miss Tavioni
Hello Rose, it is very good to see you posting on your blog. I really like what Topic you have chosen because I love to garden a swell. Keep up the good work and stay safe.
ReplyDeleteKioara rose!, I really enjoyed your blog post! about your dream garden!, wow keep up the awesome work! :)
ReplyDeleteHi Rose my name is Shivam and I go to Paihia School. I like your blog post because you shared what your garden would look like and how you would feel. I thought your dream garden would look very beautiful in person.
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